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First off, that old parchment as a backdrop for the text is perfect, that is a great idea to make it readable and fit the story. Another good bacjground with the character added in looking pretty natural. Your skill seems to have gotten better than the older front cover you did before. I almost didn't notice the skull, the darkened edge effect blends it in very nicely. The story seems very intriguing, with the custodians it adds something difffernet to make it mroe than a plain pirate story. I do notice some grammar issues, like it should have 'an Earth Custodian' instead of just 'a'. Also this sentence seems awkward when reading it, I don't get good flow in the word choices. 'If this fails, she get threatened with death by people in the town where she often was as child and spend her life before piracy.'
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OceanPirate Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks for the critique. Lol,my grammar is not that good, since English is not my most used langauge,(or i write it too fast) but i will change that.

thanks for the critique.
TrueRageXRT Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
yw, glad I could help. It is good overall, just that sentence I listed was confusing.
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